Structural Revision 4/27

1. This paper talks about the life of Thomas Rhett and how he changed country music, how much he loves his wife, and how much of a family man.

2. first paragraph- This is an introduction to Thomas Rhett and the content in the paper.
second- This paragraph describes why and how Rhett changed country music.
third- This paragraph is about his love and dedication to his wife Lauren through music and actions.
forth- This paragraph is about the dedication showed towards his family.
fifth- A conclusion and recap on the paper and three main topics.

3. The only thing I can think that's missing is in text citations. I went straight by my bubble outline.
I think my paper is cut down to the minimum. I tried to be concise with this paper and put only the right amount of detail.
I believe this is a good order for my paper. I think that my transition has been better in this paper versus others this year.

4. Blur
Family
Wife
Genre
Music

5. Introduction- This paragraph does it's job.
-First Body- I went straight by my bubble outline so nothing is missing. I think all of the information in this paragraph is useful. I think maybe I can look at the order of this paragraph. My quote could be placed in a better place.
-Second Paragraph- I went straight by the bubble outline. I think all of the information speaks to the topic and is useful. I think the order of this paragraph is fine, I tried to relate each sentence to the next.
-Third- I went straight by the bubble outline. I think all of the information is essential to provide understanding of the topic. I think the order in this paragraph is fine.
-Forth- This paragraph does it's job.

6. Blur- I could probably double the use of this word in the first paragraph.
Family- I think family is used enough but maybe could throw it in again.
Wife- I think wife is used enough but maybe once more.
Genre- The first body paragraph establishes that genre is a key word.
Music- I think this key word could be used once more maybe.